le gasp That was very good. Disturbing, yes. But I've seen worse. But this was really good. I like the way you set it up, with the centering. It was like part of the story. I liked the anger of Gerard, how you didn't know that it was Gerard until the end, and pretty much the whole thing. I'd like to critique you, but shrugs there's nothing TO critique. Good job.
Author's response
lol, thanks for your review, my mate read it and she thought Gerard was gay, so I had to edit it slightly, hehe, i was kinda angry and in a sinister mood when I wrote, lol xx