Who the HELL rated this Mary-Sue???? Sweetie, there was nothing wrong with this. Hell, this was amazing. I liked the shortness of the sentences, it made the story all the better. Geez...shakes head You never write anything badly. See, I could challenge you to write something different to see if you could do it, but seriously, you'd destroy the challenge with your writing amazazingness. (Totally made that word up.) No, but really. I have a question: Is there ANYTHING that you can't write? (I can't do fight sequences) Well, anyway, GREAT JOB AND WRITE MORE!!!