Why do you continually capitalize words like 'you', 'me', 'he'? Only nouns get capitalized. Ie. 'Gerard', 'New Jersey'. Not just and random word. You need to run your story through a spell checker or get a beta because even though your story is cute, a lot of people focus on how you present your story, like for instance your lack of grammar, spelling and punctuation. I'm not trying to be mean, but you should try harder. This story represents you as a writer. Don't make yourself look bad.
Author's response
That's not being mean, that's being constructive and I appreciate it.