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Erm. To be blunt, this isn't great. Hermione/Draco can be pulled off well, but it takes a great deal of time, writing ability and a strong plot. To concentrate on the first chapter, your plot is cliched and rather unbelievable, you've Sued!Hermione and it's peppered with misspellings, grammatical and canon errors. I must also point out that in the first paragraph when you call it a 'cell' phone, it would be called a mobile phone in England. And when you have her call her mother 'mom' she should be calling her 'mum'.

I can't pass comment on your prowess as a writer as you haven't given yourself a very good vessel in which to display it. I'd reccomend that you scrap this story and take the time to think through the logistics of a relationship between Draco and Hermione and come with a more original plot. Getting a beta would probably also help, or just getting your friend to read through it a few times before you post it just to weed out any spelling mistakes or mistakes like the ones I pointed out above.