Omg... You just described my day, except I didn't do the toaster, and instead of beating up a football team, I beat up the Bass section of the orchestra. Also, I didn't suicidal, I beat the shit out of my older brother and felt a ton better... Anyway, I found no error in your story, and I enjoy your of style writing. It's a bit of dark humor, and I love it!
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glad you like it