Not a bad effort on both of the poems. I think your cloud one is better though. The second poem seemed to go this way and that... and the inclusion of the "Wright brothers" thing kinda distracted.
Author's response
Ok, thanks! Yea, I'm kinda new at this. Well, I've been writing poems for a while, but I'm yet to write a really good one.
Once again, thanks,
taytor_tot102