Good chapter. I like how the story line is going. I wasnt crazy about the dialog in the car. Ive never done coke and then turned to the guy next to me and said "im worried about your health!" It just didnt sound right to me. Usually the converstion goes 'youve had too much...dont tell me Ive had too much-Ill do what I want...' A fight between two people who are f'up hardly makes sense anyway but Scar came off too PBS afterschool special for me. The frankie phone call was good. It left me wondering how long he knew about her and G for? Keep going!!
Author's response
you might be diapointed in the next chapter
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but, thanks for reviewing. i agree aobut the pbs thing. i GOT it off a program from the doctor's office my mum goes too...ha ha.