wow.. so u killed of harry's father... he won't be happy abou that.. especially with his best friend also gravely injured. so harry takes command of the league. and also finds out who he is. that surely should be interesting... i probably would like to see harry go into a bit of a meditative stage, where he is able to 'talk with his mentor/father', and it will also give you a chance to explain how harry cames to be what he is...
of what importance will the little girl be, who he saved from the DE and burned down town... i hope you keep her as a active character.
anyway, congrats and update soon.
Author's response
I'll let everyone in on a pointless little secret. Rachel was never a planned character until I wrote chapter 6. However, Im not one to introduce a character just to get rid of them like that. Each character introduced serves a purpose. Even "Darky" from chapter 1.