Review for Beautiful Disaster

Beautiful Disaster

(#) Life_is_42 2007-05-09

first of all the last line was complete AW XD and squueee inducing. very cute.

And two updates! happyness all around XD

I was so relieved that you responded that it IS brendons breathes again

this was so very cute :D i can't wait to find out what these presents are.

Finally one little thing:

'Yes the kids, Thomas is almost 18 months.' Brendon smiled.

'Brendon he's not even a year old yet.'

18 months is six months over a year...so Tommy would be 1 and 1/2 ...so you may want to fix that? just a little detail though, in a sea of wonderful :D

Lifey

Author's response

Yeah that was the point. :D