Dammit, girl!
I didn't hate you when you updated, but you just HAD to leave it at BRENDON GETTING INTO A FUCKING CAR CRASH!!!
I'm not mad I swear...I'm just as frustrated as SHE was when she could only listen to her boombox...
Haha, I kind of laughed when her mom was like 'give me your iPod and cell phone'...sounded so...idk...high-school-punishment-esque.
I lovvvved this chapter. And congrats for it being your longest! high fives
...And...I think for the first time in a while...I have some constructive criticism-ness for you...
SOOO MINOR THOUGH BECAUSE YOU HAVE GREAT WRITING...
Okay...well, I just wanted to plant the caution sign because I don't want you falling into cliches...like...one of them gets into an accident, the lover goes, 'le gasp!', suddenly gets permission from mother to go visit him...him leaving abruptly, etc etc...
Not that it's bad. This is one of my favorite stories of all time on ficwad, but I don't want the originality to plummet...because your first one was great...and...
asdfjkl;.
For once, I don't really know what I'm talking about when I say 'constructive criticism...' but I can only hope you kinda get my drift.
On the other hand, you left us as a good point...wanting us to read on...
And yes, I accept your desserts. takes them allll hehe. joking.
By the way! I'm going to London in the summer! But I'll be staying near Notting Hill. So maybe, if I get internet connection where I'm staying, I can ACTUALLY converse with you in the same time zone!!!
(If you don't go anywhere in the summer, that is...)
xoxoxo x infinity and beyond,
le natalie.
Author's response
aww, thanks girl! made me so happy to read this :D oh, im sorry, but the word boombox set me off for a few mins in ICT today :P yes, i checked my reviews. yeah, dont worry, I get what you mean. Thanks, and I dont think it should be cliched... or at least, it shoudlnt be TOO cliched, haha. ooo, ace, you're coming to London?! indeed, we can talk in the same time zone, haha. Geets xxx