Review for Stones


(#) Ithilwen 2007-05-27

"Nowhere" is one word.

Try using italics instead of caps and single quotes for emphasis. It'd come over smoother.

Can't really picture Jack using words like "sensuality" and "negativity." Makes him sound a touch New-Agey.

You don't seem to make the case for why Will is there on the Pearl with Jack.

This could be cool if it were a bit more focused.