Wow...that was an awesome one-shot...I've never been too happy with one-shots (merely because they're one-shots, and they never continue past the first and only chapter, lol) but this one...I'm really content with. I really seemed like you put thought a little ounce of philosophy into it, and I admire that.
Overall, awesome concept you had going, and I'm glad this just sort of popped out on the screen...Kinda inspired me, if you will.
xo, nat.