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Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) mathmans 2008-06-20
I hope Harry tears Daph's Father a new one in the process of getting Daph free from that asshole.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) Cateagle 2008-06-20
First of all, the meeting of Justin with Hermione's parents was beautifully done. I daresay the "full explanation" Justin's going to give Hermione is going to get an "interesting" reaction.
Meanwhile, given what Cyrus Greengrass has done to Daphne, I rather suspect he's going to find that Lord Potter-Black (+ whatever), the Bane of Voldemort, is not someone to annoy in this manner. If he escapes with his life, Cyrus is likely to find that it's all that he has; I'd be willing to wager that the family won't be a "great house" very much longer and that everyone will get an illustration of why "you don't piss off Harry Potter unless you have a death wish". -wicked chuckle- If he's got loans outstanding with Gringotts, guess who just bought them and foreclosed; as well as took every other legitimate avenue of economic, social, and political power open to him. Cyruss just thinks he knows how to exercise power; between Neville advising him on the social-political side and Gringotts on the economic side, I daresay Harry's going to smite him mightily.Author's response
- I seem to have pissed off quite a few people with this chapter... I thought I telegraphed what was coming from the second chapter, but I guess not.
- Harry's revenge will be appropriate... Though I shudder to think the number of laws he's going to break getting it.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) Cateagle 2008-06-20
PS. While I doubt Dumbles was directly involved in this, I'd be willing to wager that he did his bit to facilitate matters as a means of striking at Harry. If/when Harry finds this is the case, Dumbles will find out, once again, how dirty and sneaky an enemy Harry can be.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) Cateagle 2008-06-20
PS. While I doubt Dumbles was directly involved in this, I'd be willing to wager that he did his bit to facilitate matters as a means of striking at Harry. If/when Harry finds this is the case, Dumbles will find out, once again, how dirty and sneaky an enemy Harry can be.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) Cateagle 2008-06-20
PS. While I doubt Dumbles was directly involved in this, I'd be willing to wager that he did his bit to facilitate matters as a means of striking at Harry. If/when Harry finds this is the case, Dumbles will find out, once again, how dirty and sneaky an enemy Harry can be.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) dennisud 2008-06-20
In addition you handled Justin well and I can't wait to see how hermione will get along with Justins parents!
Did I say I LOVE this fic!
dennisudHarry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) whatareyouevensaying 2008-06-20
Don't let harsh reviewers get you down. They yell because they've become personally invested in the story.Author's response
- I know I shouldn't let the negatives bother me, but they do...
- I know, I know, poor me...Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) axelrajr 2008-06-20
its a really good chapter.
you are definitly getting into the darker side fo things though.Harry Potter and the Marriage Contracts
(#) DaphneGreengrass 2008-06-21
really dont get why you had to have Daphne basicly raped for this story. especially premeditated by her weak nothing of a father and some old man. maybe if Voldie was alive and the opposing force it would have been believable.
as it stands its just twisted for your pleasure.
1st Daph tried to escape multiple times.
2nd she didnt contact anyone, not even Tracey? even if she couldnt contact Harry she woulda got in contact with Tracey to inform Harry.
3rd when Tracey finally comes and confronts her, she wants it kept from Harry.
Daphne earlier was portrayed as a strong willed individual, and now you turned her into a weak victim.
she would have fought and brought in her allies to help.
seriously you could have had Harry save her before the fact, and then let his vengeance run wild. as it is now, your just gonna have him mindlessly slaughter them for his broken love interest.
Harry also doesnt fit the confident characterization he was earlier either. Daphne said she'd floo him.. what happens when she doesnt?? he sulks and does nothing except weak attempts to contact her. if he was any man and cared for her he would have went over there and found out a reason first hand, and also would have contacted her best friend (Tracey). even after her letter he still sulked instead of realizing she was in trouble... sulked to his friends.
only reason he even reacted once back at Hogwarts was bcuz Tracey threatened him... lol
Harry and his friends would have come up with a better plan than wait til back at school, they would have investigated and thought of a more proactive plan than a reactionary.
is sad to see a good story turn into trash! which is what the last 2 chaps are.Author's response
- I don't understand why it's such a surprise to anyone what happened. I telegraphed what an ass the Elder Greengrass was from the second chapter...
- The entire story is for my pleasure... that and the vast financial rewards.
- Yes, Daphne attempts escape... And fails.
- No, she didn't contact anyone. How could she? She wasn't allowed to use an owl, the House Elves work for her dad, she couldn't get near the floo, and her cell phone battery was dead. Ok, maybe not the last one, but how?
- She knows Harry and what he would try to do. She also knows that Harry doesn't have a legal leg to stand on. Daphne, knowing she was royally screwed, tried to protect Harry.
- She did fight, but had no access to allies.
- I could have, I guess, arriving at the last minute to save the damsel from a fate worse than death is a cliche for a reason I suppose, but I'm not sure how Harry was supposed to know. I guess his Boyfriend Sense could have tingled or something.
- Of course he became a whiny little bitch when he thought she had dumped him. Think about it, that is one of the more common reactions of men who are dumped when they didn't expect it from people who didn't have the horrific upbringing that Harry Potter did. The part of his personality that the Dursley's so carefully nurtured has been expecting Daphne to wise up and leave since their first date.
- Contact Tracey? Who hates him on general principle? Who, if Daphne had dumped him would be laughing her ass off at him? You're right, I don't know why he didn't talk to her while wallowing in self pity.
- No, not because Tracey threatened him. She didn't frighten him in the least. Because he now knows what's going on.
- Ok, with the information they had, AND Daphne's express instructions to leave her alone, what is your 'better proactive plan'? Hopefully one that doesn't break the law?
- I'm not really all that against breaking laws... Harry breaks several in the next chapter. I'm against getting caught breaking laws.
- I'm sorry the story has become trash for you...
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