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Princess Paopuko
2 reviewsRiku wishes for a way to show Sora how he feels, and a young girl appears who is the embodiment of those feelings; Love, loyalty, and friendship.
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Princess Paopuko
(#) TheSeer 2008-07-14
This story is all concept and no substance. You have an idea, which is good, but it's not enough. You need to think not just about "what," but "why" and "how" and "what next?" A story needs conflict, and an interesting resolution to that conflict - the closest thing to a problem any of the characters have is solved by a magic wish from the sky in paragraph three. This is not a satisfying plot. If you thought of things to happen in your story before you started writing, you'd end up with a better story, and as a bonus, it would solve the short-chapter problem you seem to have.Princess Paopuko
(#) BlackAngelChick 2008-09-05
A little bit jumpy with the plot, and since when was Riku's hair lilac? I thought it was silver.....
Was I reading this wrong?
Meh, good work anyway,i still loved it!
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