- I was looking through the new stories page and saw yours. It left me cold. Here we are a week later and this time I decide to have a look see.
I'm glad I did. The title I didn't like and couldn't make any sense out of turns out to be perfect.
I always have liked Hermione. Though I like Ginny, Luna, well, all the girls I guess.
One of my favorite stories is by HiBob, "Plantagenet". This has that flavor too.
- Heh, glad to see this one again. I do rather likely Harry's "percussive chastisement" of Dumbles and I can't blame him. It looks like life's quite 'sporting", in very different ways, for Harry in both universes. I'm looking forward to more.
In the meanwhile, nitpicks:
"...friend of Harry Potters." should either be "...friend of Harry Potter." or "...friend of Harry Potter's." I prefer the first alternate.
"...that their was..." should be "...that there was..."
"Harold Jamison Evan Potter", shouldn't that be "Harold Jamison Evans Potter"?
There may be more, but those are what caught my eye on first reading.
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