- Well, the STeam worldline sounds like an interesting one, though I'm not sure whether or not the failure to develop other power technologies is a good or bad thing. Meanwhile, it sounds like Harry on the home line is getting ready to go to war in every way possible; you can almost hear Heather Alexander's "March of Cambreath" quietly playing in the background as he does so. I suspect Tommy-boy and his lackeys are going to be rather unpleasantly awakened to the sentiments of those lyrics (q.v.). ::chuckle:: I just googled "March of Cambreath" and found that someone did "The Order Fight Song" as a filk to the "March"; wicked!!
On the down side, there were enough spelling and word choice problesm ti annoy my "beta" side but it's still an enjoyable read.
- I echo AnnF: Please get a beta.
This is an interesting story and deserves to be tweaked so it is easier to read.
I do think that Harry deserves a better explanation as to why he was never contacted by a retainer or the goblins pertaining to his family and history.
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