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Elementary Calculations
(#) GrantLarceny 2008-07-20
snape is the only villain in the books
who is going to be the villain now?
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(#) banner 2008-07-21
Another chillingly logical Harry. He doesn't make mistakes. He's the opposite of insane, in a way - Harry is an absolute realist. Good job.
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(#) Nosferatum 2008-07-21
I wonder why Harry think that Sirius and Remus were obliged to do something for him. Surely, they were friends of James, and Sirius is Harry's godfather, but if Harry was by some miracle in the position Sirius or Remus were that day, what would he do himself?Elementary Calculations
(#) Alorkin 2008-07-21
I've been pretty busy lately, and so, haven't been able to read as much as I'd like. This will cover the last several chapters. Please excuse it's length.
Dumbledore made a serious mistake in forcing Harry's hand. People don't like being manipulated, especially people like Harry, who have devoted their lives to a certain goal, only to have that all rendered moot in a flick of a wand.
Harry' discussion with Voldemort is a nice twist. Effectively: "If you leave me alone, I leave you alone."
His warning about the muggles is also a good idea. That seems to be one of the weak areas in the wizarding world's perceptions of the other 99 percent of the world's population.
It turns out you and I agree on Snape's character. Either Dumbledore is totally naive and truly believes Snape's 'remorse' or he has convinced himself that Snape is his pawn. There are far too many inconsistencies, in canon relating to Snape. His 'spying' is suspect at best.
He leaked information to Dumbledore, but how much of that information is truly valuable? How many of Voldy's plans were spoiled by his 'spying'? My guess is none.
In addition,, Snape's value as a spy would have been rendered worthless by Dumbledore's 'outing' him in a public venue, unless he was ordered to be an agent by Voldy.
I especially liked: "the 'greater good' clause in heaven."
I really feel for Hermione, but she was so set on breaking out of her 'bookish' persona, without taking into consideration her personality. Her attitudes are ingrained by her rearage, and trying to shed that persona will only lead to ulcers. On the other hand, her current attitudes have made her position in Gryffindor somewhat uncomfortable.
It seems Snape has discovered Harry's dark side. I think it's not so much that Harry is immoral, as he is Amoral. he does not actively hate Snape, but he sees him as an obstacle to be removed or neutralized.
Voldemort's introspection brings quite a few things to light. He seems to be less 'evil' than he is painted in canon. He is driven. A lot f Harry's cannon belief in Voldy's evil is fostered by both Dumbledore and his lot.
You have also done away with the horcrux tripe. The story was going allong so well, until book six when JKR stomped on the brakes and turned hard left. She brought Ginny-Sue out of the background and made her into 'SUPER-GINNY!', while reducing Hermione's IQ by about two hundred points and Having Harry think with his little head.
The investigation has cost Dumbledore a great deal of his political credit. While he cannot be ousted, his position is eroded. It shouldn't take much more to topple him.
I'd be willing to bet Dumbledore figured Harry would fall into Sirius' arms weeping in joy because his long lost godfather had come to rescue him from durance vile.
Instead, Harry's reaction was lukewarm at best. He was well reasoned, and cautious. He is definitely not a trusting soul. That can be laid at Dumbledore's door along with his other sins. He is, however, willing to work with Sirius.
As before, I eagerly await the next chapterr(s) of 'Elementary Calculations'.
Alorkin
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(#) Wonderbee31 2008-07-21
Good part here, and can see how this Harry would be a bit more wary of Sirius this time, and considering Albus seemed to bend over backwards to help Snape but seemed to do nothing for Sirius, who was a suspected DE only, will be curious to see how their godson/father relationship develops over time.Elementary Calculations
(#) draregerreip 2008-07-22
You write really well. Your characters are fairly coherent and well defined.
Your Harry, for exemple, is really well depicted. He definitely is the product of his early years and makes for a poor human being. He may be very bright and powerful, but he's going to have a lot to learn to get into the human race.... little things such as empathy, love, etc...
I really wonder where you are going to take him. Keeping him like that, you are going to make him like a future Voldie. Or maybe you are going to humanize him and make him more in touch with others, that could be interesting as well...
Thanks for your story.
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(#) longreachjones 2008-07-24
Once again, a fantastic chapter. As always, you have left me all but chewing the furniture in anticipation of the next chapter.
I can't wait to see what dastardly twist you have given to Lupin.Elementary Calculations
(#) BellaxAngel 2008-07-29
I recently found your story and read it, and I must say, I love how Harry isn't all (for lack of a better word)good like he is in the books.
I personally like the fact he, like someone commented before,is a realist, has a bit of a sociopathic personality, and is intelligent and logical. Also, the fact that your story isn't cliche unlike a few other stories I've read is a big plus. Anyway, on to other things.
I dislike Dumbledore, mainly because of the fact that he manipulated a few things to 'force' Harry into attending Hogwarts. I especially like the way you write Dumbledore because:
1. He was wrong about Harry.
2. He's a bit naive.
At first, I thought Harry was going to be put in Slytherin, but after hearing Harry's logic, being put into Ravenclaw does make more sense.
Anyway, before I start rambling, overall, I love your story, my favorite parts being the talks with Voldemort.
I can't wait to read what ahppens with Remus.
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(#) WootMannen 2008-08-05
Good chapter. I hope to see some more interaction between Harry and Sirius, as well as Harry and Voldemort. Concerning Sirius, I think he would choose Harry over Dumbledore, even this colder Harry. Especially since Dumbles didn't use any of his vaunted influence to check if Sirius REALLY was guily! Kinda strange, considering that the old man seem to be a real big believer in second chances and the innate goodness of everyone...
Keep up the good work!!!
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