(#) jump_jives 2008-08-30"...let her think this took a lot longer to decide. That might help us later on"
I loved this, because, as a parent, I have done the same thing once or twice.
This is a nice story. As you mentioned in your notes, Hermione and Harry are both OOC, but they are not radically so (after all its not like either of them is shaking up with Snape or Draco - shudder) and its AU. There were a few minor punctuation errors and a couple places where you put in the wrong pronoun, but all in all it was well written.
- A very nice beginning, I look foreward to reading more of this.
One possible point that I have thought over and wondered several times which Sirius might pull off here as he seems to have quite a bit of influence there.
Why doesn't he go to a foreign ministry and ask for questioning under Veritaserum regarding the day he was arrested and his role.
It looks to me like a good way to prove his innocence and would be a nice egg in the face of the Geezergamot :)
Author's responseI will admit there is a continuation of the story floating around in my mind where Sirius visits France and does just that. rather that portion of the story gets written or not who knows. As I said this was on my hard drive for over a year before I cleaned it up and posted it. Plus there's Motorcycle to deal with.
(#) Wonderbee31 2008-08-31I'm glad I found this story, as it reads really well. Nice to think of the feelings that would grow with Harry and Hermione, and have to say, those feelings were there in canon, until they got shoved aside with a bulldozer bit of hack writing. Good part and is going on my favs list.
- Sirius smile to himself when he noticed the attention Harry was attracting
I wasn't even a bikini
His eyes went wide as Hermione head for the elevator.
The activities they had in mind Harry dreamed about at might now but it wasn't a girl from the island's face he saw in his dreams.
- 'Their itching all right.'
told me that thinks like that just were not done in her world,"
Oh in the majority of cases they would try to find out how the girl in question felt, but it is not be required.
why would the grangers be so strongly patriarchal in the muggle world?
And their might be one or two other mothers that have been telling me how good a dancer their daughters are and all about the boyfriend they are bringing."
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