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School. Boys. Life. Love
3 reviewsShaylee-anne Hanson is the new girl. she just moved to Belleville New Jersey to live with her dad. she meets some new guys. (I suck at summaries. please read if you want)
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School. Boys. Life. Love
(#) sweetbittermiss 2008-09-12
I like the concept so far, but maybe you should try to be a little more literate and be aware of your punctuations. Like when you start a new sentence, capitalize the first letter. And be careful not to put periods in where commas (,) should be.
I don't want to be rude, but hun, this could be rated as illiterate, and I don't want someone to diss on your story because of 'technical' errors.
Great story, though!
Please continue!!!
xoxp,
Adi.Author's response
Thanks :D . and finally, I have been waiting for someone to tell me that I have mistakes in my writing but no one has done that yet. You are the first one. Sweet. Thanks again.
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(#) Dondon1827 2008-09-12
Yeah I agree with bittermiss, it would be a shame if someone rated this illiterate cause it is awesome.
Carry on plz
Dondon xo.School. Boys. Life. Love
(#) Hoodiegirl86 2008-09-12
YAY I luv this but try to fix the typos. Read it aloud if it helps you notice the mistakes. But yeah the ideas really good :)
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