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23 GBP
(#) Ithilwen 2006-03-11
Amusing. Believable OC and Mr. Dursley is IC.
Grammar etc:
No big problems in here. Certainly nothing that got in the way of the story.
The N in "Number Four, Privet Drive" is usually capitalized.
"purple faced" should be "purple-faced."
"Never mind" is two words. "Altogether" is one word in this case. "Self-appointed" is a hyphenated word.23 GBP
(#) DrT 2006-05-06
Since I read your roommate's piece, I thought I should read this one, too. Well done. Somehow, I just can't feel sorry for Wormtail going after the peanut butter
"T"Author's response
Good scientific approach to fic reading. I approve! grin And yeah, that peanut butter tooth will get you every time...23 GBP
(#) black_spot 2006-05-29
Nice twist. I like the idea of Voldemort not being able to hear very well. Was Harry aware of the dead body - I would have liked to have seen his re-action.Author's response
Harry was not aware of the body, no. He was away at school. I thought about having him at home, but I kind of wanted to keep this short.23 GBP
(#) Clell65619 2009-01-10
- Very nice. Your story was recommended on the Caer Azkaban newsgroup, so you might get a rash of reviews over the next few days.
- very nice in deed.
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