(#) red_jacobson 2008-11-26Cute story, but a couple of errors with characters names jumped out at me. The characters in question are Daphne (Not Dauphine - which, if memory serves, is the name or title of a French noble during the time of Joan of Arc) and Seamus not Shamus (which is a slang term for a private detective)
Other than that, while the story is fairly derivative of multiple others, it's still a cute story that needs to be expanded, it doesn't really end, as written, it just stops.
Red's already caught the Daphne and Seamus errors; I didn't see much else off, other than a couple of missing commas and I think that Ficwad sometimes just drops commas for no reason.
Harry and the rest are in for a bit of a surprise, but I reckon they'll enjoy it. ;-)
If Harry's smart (and I'm sure he will be, given his choice in girlfriends), he'll let his wives have the running of his household. Outside in the world he'll have plenty of other venues to be his own man in. They're smart girls, and they'll respect that, I think.
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