Categories > Books > Harry Potter > If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
We Are Family
12 reviewsPansy is frustrated, NEWTs are finished, Bellatrix ponders the question of her existence. Harry is scrutinized by his in-laws and the Coven and the mums converge on Sirius. Voldemort contemplates...
5Original
Reviews
If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) lycus 2008-12-20
That was great but I expected Sirius ot faint or something. I know that I asked in my last review but will Narcissa start to feel love for Harry like Bellatrix did when she saw him in the cave. And does Narcissa still have random orgasims from Harry and Cissy when they are loving each other. And I didn't know that Katie was in the coven I thought that it was just Angelina and Alicia. And I hope that Sirius has a larger place to stay for all of the ladies Potter. And did we miss Minervas entrance. But I wanted to know if the Dursleys will ever hear about Harry being on good terms with the Royal Family?Author's response
Wow, I can’t believe I screwed up so badly. I have no choice but to credit you for doing my ex-post-facto beta work for me. After a quick edit you’ll find that Angelina, not Katie, comes through the fireplace floo, and yes, Minerva comes through with Poppy.
Narcissa will always react to Cissy’s “happy times” but she is firmly imprinted on Severus – that lucky bat! Intellectually she knows she is echoing Cissy, but she was created to be absolutely loyal to her man, who just happens to be Severus.
Sirius’s home is large enough for all the Ladies of the Coven, and their mums. His London flat is a converted Victorian-era hotel. I should probably mention that in the story somewhere, huh?
The Dursleys will learn of Harry’s royal connections, and their reactions will be predictable.
And therein lies the problem.
I hate predictable.
So I’m working on it from what I hope will be a different angle.
N!If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) Cateagle 2008-12-21
Heh, this chapter moves the story along nicely, but it's mainly the humor I enjoyed, along with some very good lines throughout. I think Severus' line near the end was probably the classic, though. I admit, I'll feel very, very sorry for the next troll Pansy ends up combatting, she's going to have a lot of anger to unload on the troll and it's not going to be pretty. Meanwhile, I'm thinking that Tom may not have as long as he thinks to make a move.Author's response
Thanx, as always, for reading and reviewing. I wish I could take credit for Severus’ line, “There is a God. . .” but I paraphrased a well-known Russian proverb to make it Wicca-centric.
As far as the next troll that Pansy meets, can you say “Fine red mist?” I knew you could. . .
Tom is isolated and pretty near the end of his rope, calling up any of the major daemons is never a good idea.
Hmmmmm, Voldemort vs the god of destruction. Who do you root for in that one?
N!If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) LordSeagen 2008-12-21
Really great chapter. I just love your story and wish it would never end but we know that can't happen. Keep up the good work and update soon.Author's response
Thank you for your review, and your kind words of encoragement. There are a few more chapters to go. Then I've got to get back to work on my other writing projects.
N!If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) Clayva 2008-12-21
He PerfesserN,
This is so twisted it is fun and I for one like it immensely. Harry with 21 wives needs 9 more so that he can have one for every night in the month, of course that leaves months with 31 days for him so that he can have one day to himself. It seems that each chapter that you write has something that will attract any individual that happens to read the story. As for me I like it all and cannot wait to find out what Pansy will do to the next troll that you are going to allow her to fight. Wonderful chapter and I can hardly wait for the next one. CarolAuthor's response
Hi Yuletide Carol,
(Sorry, couldn’t resist, I’ll be good now, I promise. . .)
I’m glad you’re enjoying the story – it’s been fun to write and that’s usually a good sign. I have to admit that “One and Twenty” Witches in the Coven was a sort of random number (the product of the two most significant magical figures in numerology, which you know, of course, is Aritmacy without the math. . .) But writing quality time for Harry and his twenty-one brides is not easy. I don’t recommend it for the faint of heart. Tricia and Glynda and Alicia and Angelina keep bugging me for more “Harry time.”
Spoiler Alert
Voldemort is going to agree to liaise with Abbadon, God of Destruction, who will employ a troll army. You can easily imagine Pansy’s feral grin when she hears about that.
Next chapter will be up just in time for Christmas.
N!If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) snapehater 2008-12-21
just enjoyable well done i just love this story
until the next great chapter keep up the great work :)Author's response
Thanx, I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Next update will be on Christmas Eve - Happy Yuletide!
N!If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) Wonderbee31 2008-12-21
Great paret there, and sorry for taking so long to review. Now, Millie and Maggie rock, and can just imagine her in all her amazon style if she wanted to. Hilarious to see how all the Mum-in-laws got Harry but good, and will be looking forward to what happens next time. If Tom is going to do something stupid, will likely be very stupid. Can't wait to see what all happens with Narcissa and Bellatrix as time goes on, as Bellatrix is looking to be going off on her on if things keep up, though really something to see that she is so ready to go on that one thing. Great writings!Author's response
Thanx, as always, for reading and reviewing. We’ll see more of Maggie in the next chapter, Remus will see even more. . .
Yes, of course Tom will do something stupid – the last act of a desperate man usually has unexpected consequences.
Narcissa is bonded with Snape, although she’s still going to have the occasional “happy time” because of her link with Cissy.
Bellatrix will be a central character for an upcoming chapter, but I won’t give up the surprise. Stay tuned!
N!If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) kaylee_jane_potter 2008-12-21
total props to the beginning of "Love Actually" with "Billy" cussing out his mistake.Author's response
Good call! I often place an homage or two to a book or film I've enjoyed, and I think Bill Nighy was perfectly cast in Love Actually.
N!If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) michaelc 2008-12-22
great chapter, cant wait for moreAuthor's response
Thanx, next chapter will be up on the 24th.
N!If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) zbigdragon 2008-12-22
I have enjoyed this story very much, but I think you may have made a little mistake with:
[ "Cissy is my biological mother, even though she never carried me, which will make Harry your uncle by marriage." ]
If Cissy is Narcissa mother that make Harry her Step-Father, and Step-Uncle. Severus's Step-Father-in-Law, and Draco's Step-Grandfather.
It also make Harry Step-Uncle-in-Law to Severus, and Step-Great Uncle to Draco though Bella. Also Bellatrix's Father-in-Law and Step-Uncle.
All by marriage to Cissy and Bella.Author's response
Man, I can’t believe I missed that. This is why everyone should have a beta-proofreader, by now you’ve probably seen the chapter re-posted with the correction you’ve pointed out. I plan to use the Uncle aspect in a later chapter.
Thanx again,
N!If Wishes Were Hippogriffs
(#) zbigdragon 2008-12-24
PerfesserN,
If you need a beta reader?
I will would be willing to give a try.
I am disabled and enjoy reading Harry Potter stories.
I save the ones I like to a USB drive to again and again.
This is one of them.
Let me know.
ZBigDragon@yahoo.comAuthor's response
Thank you, Zbig, I'll e-mail you after the Holidays.
N!
Sign up to review this story.