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The Tummy Wars Series
(#) Ithilwen 2008-12-22
I would have enjoyed this more if you'd established where they were and what they were doing before going into the dialogue. Also, you might want to go easy on the semicolons.Author's response
I would have if I had written it for outsiders to read originally, but I didn't and I won't re-write it. It was written so my friends and I could understand it, and I just decided to post it. It wasn't meant to be understood by anyone else. It's just meant to be random anyway, so the setting doesn't matter and as for the plot...well...that's nonexistent.
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