(#) Glenstorm63 2017-11-11Hi there. I really don't think you needed to stop the chapter there. It was very intriguing and hoojed me in. And I am 54. I think it could do with a little extra detail about who the child is and why they are with grandma. And how they usually find grandma to be mood-wise might help. A bit of description about the house and the nature of the books on the shelf might be useful. Also it would be got to get a dictionary and check spelling. Your sentence structure is pretty good but it falls down with spelling. Silhouette is correct. Silowiet is not.
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