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So what are the lives of the characters of narnia after they come back. Seen from the view of my favorite character.
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left alone
(#) Glenstorm63 2017-11-11
Hi there. I really don't think you needed to stop the chapter there. It was very intriguing and hoojed me in. And I am 54. I think it could do with a little extra detail about who the child is and why they are with grandma. And how they usually find grandma to be mood-wise might help. A bit of description about the house and the nature of the books on the shelf might be useful. Also it would be got to get a dictionary and check spelling. Your sentence structure is pretty good but it falls down with spelling. Silhouette is correct. Silowiet is not.left alone
(#) mina09 2025-12-27
Hey there!
Your story engaged me right from the beginning. The world-building and emotions are so vivid that I kept imagining everything as comic panels. If a comic version were created, it would look visually very strong and could attract even more readers.
I’m a Webtoon/comic artist and also work on character and cover designs. If you’d ever like to explore a visual adaptation, even just a small scene, we could talk about it.
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Wonderful story!
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