(#) trooper103 2010-07-21My only criticism: Please, actually spell out the word "and". Stop using "&" because it isn't proper to use in a story. If you can't be bothered to spell out something so simple, you are telling readers that you don't care about the quality of your writing. If you don't have a beta reader I recommend you find one.
Author's responseTrue and I got a beta for chapter 4. Sorry but I've been unable to correct my previous chapters.
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