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Chapter One
1 reviewA story that focuses on Zoe and Wash's relationship where some new passengers present them, and the rest of the crew, with a difficult situation. Takes place after the BDM with one major change reg...
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Under Their Skin
(#) Rous 2006-04-11
I like how this is going, with one exception: the tense. I am finding it difficult to read in the present tense. I keep waiting for the set-up to catch up with the story. Admittedly, I am only through half of the first chapter; however, I am not sure I can finish. It holds promise and otherwise seems well written. The only other thing that caught my eye was some of the punctuation is off. Semi-colons would be of more benefit in some instances.
I definately will check out some other things, if the tense thing is not a signature. Thank you for sharing.
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