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And we all fall down
3 reviewsGerard's struggles with his herion addicted girlfriend Riley and his own guilt for introducing her to it is driving him insane. Will he be able to overcome his demons and help her overcome hers? co...
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And we all fall down
(#) XxkelseyxX 2009-01-27
Sounds like it could get juicy!! LOL
Update soon, I'll watch for it!And we all fall down
(#) RocketQueen1 2009-01-27
Sounds like a good start so far. :]
Just a couple of things;
It might help to run a final spell check, or read over it yourself, I noticed a couple of mistakes.
Also, it gets kinda hard to read text in a big block like that, so it might help to use paragraphs, or to insert a line break every so often to break it up a bit.
If you want any more help, or would like a Beta Reader, feel free to PM me. :)And we all fall down
(#) haleyxheroin 2009-01-27
well, it was spaced out into paragraphs when i wrote it but somehow it ended up looking like that when i put it on there..and i just noticed it. idk why it fucked up like that ..oh well thnx for the review
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