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Battered Hearts
(#) DrT 2009-04-11
Good dramatic ending!Author's response
Thanx Doc, glad you like it.
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(#) Wonderbee31 2009-04-12
Very good ending there, and so all the absorbed minds are still there if I understand correctly? Wild, and can't wait to see what that will mean with the next Cog on the way, and sho is the original that's after Hermione and the child, and will be curious as to whether what Harry has found might do with a life-debt?Author's response
Oh, very, very astute.
Spoiler Alert
Part of the story's resoultion involves Harry invoking more than one life-debt!
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(#) HalfFrogPrince 2009-04-12
Oh man,
Original - that's the best way to rate this one. You keep it fresh, and real. Maybe Harry can rally all the personalities that have been absorbed by the cog and beat it (or them) that way?
I guess we'll see an update next weekend?
Author's response
Thanx, HalfFrog,
I admit that in my outline the captured personalities figured prominently in the outcome, and still might. It depends on how far afield the actual story varies from the outline.
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(#) syaygel 2009-04-12
Tatlem,
I appreciate your explanation of how the children, ages 2 and 3, are acting like much older kids. Although, our little boy was already reading when he was four years old.
The cog that left the Department of Mysteries, is it the real bad guy? What will they do to keep thier children?
Must I wait until Saturday?
I make very good cookies. . .
SYaygelAuthor's response
Thank you, Sevgilim, for reading and reviewing.
You are the only one to notice that Harry’s and Hermione’s children are much more mature than RL two and three year olds, so I put that description in the story just in case someone noticed.
You, Tatlem, are very good.
Spoiler Alert
All the cogs are the bad guy, they are networked. So, in a very real sense, they all share the mantle of ‘bad guy’.
I hope to have an update by Saturday.
Do you have oatmeal raisin?
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(#) Clell65619 2009-04-15
- Wow.
- Well, Harry knows that the Cogs share a hive consciousness, how long until he does a head count in the DOM I wonder....Author's response
Mini-Spoiler
Yep, they are networked, think global catalog servers.
To take out any one cog, you have to take them all out!
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(#) siledubhghlase 2009-04-15
My heart just stopped. Sob. "He's after the baby!" BUT WHO? Who's after the baby? Why? Percy, out of jealousy? Possibly, but he couldn't have wanted his brother to kill his sister and then turn around and murder him, could he? Was Ginny an unfortunate victim in the wrong place at the wrong time? Is all of this because Percy has the hots for Hermione, or is all of this to punish Hermione for being a Muggleborn marrying into his Pureblood family? If it's Percy, there's an accomplice and very likely an unwitting or unwilling one at that.
I say this because of a possible clue in Hermione's Magical Family Law research. Because she's a Muggleborn widow, her children can be taken from her and placed with their Pureblood in-laws, but Harry has evidently found a loophole, whatever it is. It has to have something to do with his relationship with Hermione and their plans to marry when her period of mourning is passed--unless there's a way around that too.
My guess is that even though Harry's a Half-blood, he married into that Pureblood family too, and is a widower of said Pureblood, which makes him one of the Weasley brothers...? If he marries Hermione, that satisfies the law. OR... Harry's the Head of an old Wizarding family in his own right--and a Pureblood one at that (until his father married his Muggleborn mother, that is). Again, that might satisfy the law.
At any rate, I hope Harry's able to talk to Ron while he's in Lighter's head and find out who "he" is and why he's after the baby. Now he knows why Ron went off the deep end and became violent. He has to tell Hermione. She has to know, it's only right. Meanwhile, I hope Cheryl has a full recovery. Perhaps Harry can help the entities to cross over in peace.
Great story!Author's response
Wow!
Thank you for a very well thought out review.
I can answer all the questions you’ve asked here, but it would involve MAJOR spoilers.
I will, however, drop some not so subtle hints.
The one who’s after Hermione’s unborn baby is the same one that killed Ginny.
The one who killed Ginny did not kill Ron.
Harry and Hermione are just one straw short of telling the wizard-centric world to stuff it!
Cheryl is the only LIVING link to the personalities trapped within the network of cogs – this will prove to be dead useful!
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
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