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Year Two - Proposals
26 reviewsThe project is discussed, the last of the planned flashbacks and Lucius discovers he made a mistake.
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Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
(#) sparky40sw 2009-05-30
yeah -thanks for this ch. it not only helped clarify the storyline - it took my mind of the biceps muscle i tore 3 hrs ago.
love the you build here - things finally making sense
warm regards
Author's response
- Glad you liked it. This is the end of the flashbacks, the past is now up to date...Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
(#) deamondeathstone 2009-05-30
Nice. Maybe there can be a bit more Pepper and Harry in the flashbacks? Because they seem like a cute mother-son....ehm Executive personal assistant and the Boss' son.... ah do they think they are kidding.
Anyway it's cute and fluffy and stuff that i never seen you do before and i like it.Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
(#) twilliams1797 2009-05-31
I quite like the Lucius Makeover.. you should market that as the new thing for deatheaters everywhere. I think in the future, Hermione and the girls will be somewhat concerned/jealous/ upset over the Julie Powers thing..that could make for an interesting bit.
thank you for another interesting chapter.Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
(#) wolfe3 2009-05-31
Every time a new chapter comes out,I tend to reread the whole story.Yes,I enjoy this story that much(not to mention that multiple things happen every chapter).I'm glad to see your writers has eased up.good job,and I hope the next chapter comes much easier than this one did.Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
(#) wolfe3 2009-05-31
whoops!!! i meant your writers block.Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
(#) jsdailey 2009-06-01
Great Chapter! I'm glad there was an update!
The idea of a magic computer is fantastic and falls right in line with the idea of true technomagery.
Keep up the good work!Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
(#) wordhammer 2009-06-01
Excellent dialogue and a captivating story; I await the next installment with glee!
However...
Everyone seems to be acting reasonably, and therein lies the worry. Here comes the upstart Harry, hell-bent on transforming the British Magical world to suit his idea of what's appropriate. I would expect there to be a 'back to values' reaction to Harry's quirky muggle devices. They have up til recent years been treated as heresy yet the conservatives are remarkably silent, aside from a fanatic's ill-conceived plan to bring back the boogeyman to make it all ugly again. I very much enjoy the Marvel cameos and I swear you accidentally channeled Robert Downey Jr.'s performance when writing Tony's dialogue. The story is alive, but I think it needs a stronger antagonist, or Harry will roll over this quaint backwater culture like a German Panzer cruising through the Ardennes.
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Author's response
- All very true, but it's still just second year...
- It will be third year when the Patil/Starktech toys start showing up in Diagon... Nothing to fancy at first, cd players, simple texting devices, hand held video games, all modified to work around magic will start showing up on the Express and at Hogwarts, generating a bit of hate and discontent among the old guard families (and among their children who won't be allowed any of the spiffy new toys)
= In fairness, I wrote most of what dialog Tony had before the film came out (or at least before I saw it), so they're copying me...
- Tom is going to be a plenty strong antagonist, as soon as he can get re-embodied... End of fourth year, as per schedule...
- Harry hasn't really had that much in the way of challenges yet, beyond the Troll and Dumbledore first year. He isn't going to the Chamber, and Sirius is already sprung from the big house...
- Harry's life won't get all that interesting again until 4th year...Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
(#) Cateagle 2009-06-01
Only time will tell if this will do it, because, sadly, Draco is adlibbing like mad in my head, and refuses to be the ass we all love to hate in this story...
Hmm, almost sounds like this one used some of his father's money to buy a functional brain. This could make life interesting for all around him, and rather more challenging for his father as I suspect -this- Draco would want to know more of just why his father was attacked.
Harry Potter and The Invincible Technomage
(#) TxA_GunFighter 2009-06-15
Good chapter. Love how you handled Lucy.
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(#) PGHammer 2009-07-14
The Power Pack was jointly headed by Julie Power and Franklin Richards (yes, the son of Reed and Susan Richards, two of the original founding members of the Fantastic Four). As the son of Tony Stark (even had Tony not been Iron Man) Harry would likely have still run into Franklin Richards (if I'm not mistaken, at this point in the timeline, neither Reed or Sue is aware that Tony is, in fact, Iron Man) as Reed Richards and Tony Stark (along with both Victor Von Doom and Otto Octavius) are well-known scientists and inventors. (Dr. Octavius is, if I recall correctly about this point in the timeline, teaching at ESU; among his students is Peter Parker. The accident that created Doc Ock hasn't happened yet.) Reed and Victor are ESU alumni (and brain rivals while at ESU; that's according to Victor himself), as is Tony Stark; Richards and Stark both recruit at ESU (both have their first encounters with Peter Parker there, and neither is initially related to Spider-Man; Parker had applied for internships with Reed and with Stark Enterprises).
Cassandra Webb is one of the most shadowy figures in the Marvel universe (and she's no more evil than Uatu the Watcher, and far less is known of him), despite her encounters with most of the heroes (and no small number of the villains) of said universe. She's at least as alien as Stephen Strange (or Agatha Harkness) from either a muggle OR magical POV; Strange himself admits to being baffled by her. Strange at least suspects (as does Reed Richards) that she is at least complicit in the grey turn of Victor Von Doom, especially while ruler of Latveria (which had a reputation as bleak as Bulgaria or Genosha prior to said turn).
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