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Unspeakable
(#) xBlackHeartedAngelx 2009-08-02
PLEASE keep up your story. I really enjoy reading it.
:DUnspeakable
(#) _Amy_Revenge_ 2009-08-02
I was just thinking about this the other day, too :) I'm so happy he's awake! And the doctor..I dunno. She's got a certain way of doing things, they just seem weird. But what I wonder is..will Gerard be able to talk as well as before? I sure hope so.
I really like the way you write. It just has a way of making you understand what everyone's going through. It's amazing.
Write more soon, Love :)
REVENGEUnspeakable
(#) mildlyobsessed 2009-08-03
i love this story! i wanna know what happens :D
please continue, you have a gift for emotive writing :)
Unspeakable
(#) IeroMyHero 2009-08-03
Okay, hi. I have NO idea what the hell is happening, because I didn't get either of these chapters. Did you email them to me? Because if you did, I didn't get it.
I think my email is really messed up, so I am SO sorry that I didn't get to beta this for you.
Uhm, well, if it makes any difference, both these chapters were great. I looked through but I didn't find any mistakes, but I was reading fast, so I'll see again later.
The only thing is, you could have added more detail at the beginning of this one, when Gerard wakes up, because I thought it was a little short.
And about the ending, hmm, it's really your choice. The good thing about ending here is that you know, you wrote up so much drama, so to have a cliche, happy ending would SUCK. But this sort of leaves it open, like you don't know if Gerard has a relapse or something. It's for the readers' imaginations to decide that.
However, if you want to give your readers more closure, you could write another chapter or two. Unless you add more drama, in which case you can write more.Author's response
Yeah I did email you the chapter Time but I don't think it worked or something. If you want I can still email both chapters but eh up to you. Oh yeah, and I didn't put much detail into Gerard waking up because it was the second time he's woken up and I figured there's not much point putting practically the same detail into it again. I would pretty much just be repeating myself.
Anyway, good to know you're still alive!Unspeakable
(#) ninthlevel 2009-08-07
This is a good story. I think you should continue it so we all find out what happens and if he recovers eventually.
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