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Simply Beautiful
(#) Dragen 2009-08-09
Oh what a great start to the story mate, I can't wait to read more.Simply Beautiful
(#) Dragen 2009-08-09
Oh what a great start to the story mate, I can't wait to read more.Simply Beautiful
(#) dennisud 2009-08-09
First I suggest getting a beta rewder to help you with your grammar, sentence structure and word usage. There were times I had to reread a sentence or passage twice which definitely put the brakes on the flow of readding.
The story itself is good but again work on the grammar or get help to write it properly, then you'll have mor readers who would want to come back for more!
dennisud
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