(#) sock_monkey 2009-11-30woah. That was awsome! I really loved the plot line. But it could have been better. I think it would be easier to read if you put periods after EVERY sentence and " " every time someone speaks. Like, I love you Gerard said would be "I love you" Gerard said. And if the thinking parts were italicised like, "you're falling for him" frank thought to himself. Other than that i thought it was great! xo-Erin
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