- Interesting outset. Few things are new in the fanfic heavens, but this is a setup i haven't seen before. There's not much to flame or applaud yet, but you have my interest firmly in hand. Let's see where you'll take us.
Author's responseThanks for reading, and I hope you enjoy the ride.
(#) juggler196 2010-08-10You've definitely written a good first chapter. It did what the first chapter/part of a story is supposed to do: it drew me in and made me want to read more. Please update soon.
Author's responseIt was originally going to be a longer section, but this seemed like a good place to leave it off. I'll update as soon as I can.
- Good attention-grabbing start that leaves me looking forward to more. Along the way I can see the Veela assisting Harry and Hermione in seeing what truly lies between them and then in acting on that knowledge (mind you, I could see it being done strictly as advice or as "facilitating" it in a three-, or more-, some. Of course, with this assistance being offered and accepted, the deserter well might not return to them at all; not that he'd really be missed under these circumstances.
- Man do you know how to grab someones attention. Please continue to write your stories, We have been waiting for a while for you to continue with them especally Team of Rivals. It is good to see that one of the better authors is writing again.
Author's responseIt's just a matter of writing the kind of story that you'd like to read yourself.
I've got half a chapter of Team of Rivals in another window now. I just have to write the other half...
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