- It's certainly intriguing for a beginning. There's not enough there to properly say anything concrete about except your writing style, which is very nice, well described, not to prose heavy, and I enjoy that. :)
The concept of the story, from what I can grasp is: I'm guessing Harry went mad, flew off the handle, and has gone round the twist or something? So, now he's in St. Mungo's? Did Ginny die? That could do it if you're going for cannon. With fannon, it can be anything. I love fannon, but cannon twists are great too.
In the past, I've had plot bunnies nip at me that include psychiatric wards as well - most of them are incredibly dark and insane and I've refrained from writing them due to disturbing everyone within my vicinity. Either way, I'm interested to see where you go with this. So far, even though there's not much, it's good.
Keep going! :)
(#) datbenik513 2011-02-24Keep this awesomeness coming, Hannah!
Certainly intriguing setting; I really want to know what tragedies had happened in the past. This is the proper way to intrigue your readers and draw them into your story, leaving them screaming for more.
BTW, I saw your that other story had disappeared and the review count of "200 years" had also gone down. Did you delete and reupload them?
Good job, gimme some more!
(#) HallowsNotHorcruxes 2011-02-24Hey datbenik! I missed you!
I had some technical trouble with 200 Years a while back. I sort of gave up on it for now, but I have a tendency to forget about fanfics until I'm cleaning out my Document drive, and then I continue them.
No worries, I've already got an almost finished chapter for this headed your way!
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