- Whee, wonderful. This is the first time i've seen a platform elevator in Myrtle's bathroom i love that idea. Pranking Voldy with the diary was wonderful lol. I hope the Weasley boys don't get caught by Voldy.
Author's responseThere has to be an easy way to get to the toilets from the chamber; 16 year old Riddle didn't have a phoenix to help him out.
The Weasley boys will be explained in the first part of the next chapter
- Well! That was an unexpected conclusion. However, it was probably best to deal with Voldemort now rather than let him poison the school for a year (especially the young Slytherin firsties). Voldemort isn't stupid. He must realise someone is out to get him. However, he may mistakenly think that this is Dumbledore.
Will you have the rest of year one or will you move right to year four (which I think is the next significant milestone in Voldemort's plans)?
A nice, exciting story that has found its own way through a well-used plot device to tell its own unique tale.
BenRG's Rating: 7/10
Author's responseThanks, and I see no reason to allow Voldie to stick around, just to make the writing easier And I haven't even started year 3 yet, and am working on chapter 25
- Great stuff. Loved the fake diary! How many people get a chance to prank a dark lord? Only one inconsistency, I believe Terry Boot and Mandy are both originally Ravenclaws. You had one going to Hufflepuff. It will be interesting to see where you go with the rest of the first year. A kinder gentler Snape?
Author's responseWell, a less snarky and less murderous Snape, anyway!
- Just about chapter 11 again - which I read a couple of times - how nice I thought it was to read of a 'relaxed' Hermione. The two kids 'playing like seals' (however it was phrased) - very nice.
Did I miss something? Was there a real chance that Dumbledore and Lupin could have captured or destroyed Riddle's essence with their hexes as he fled? Harry and his cohorts seem to have been planning a much longer campaign, looking for the sixth horcrux, etcetera, but if they could have destroyed - or, given a horcrux still exists, even captured Tom - then all the heat would have been off them, and they could have sought the final horcrux at their leisure. But this possibility was never mentioned.
I was just surprised by the last page where 'a spell just missed his essence'. I reads as if Voldemort was in real jeopardy; yet I don't recall our heroes plotting "let's capture Voldemort, put him in a bottle and then we can have a feast and spend the next decade leisurely looking for the last horcrux before we destroy him for good".
Wondering what Hermione's reaction will be to Harry's first stay in the Infirmary. Did Harry expect to be knocked out this time around?
Good storting; in particular Draco's selection, quite clever!
Author's responseIt was more an opportunity they had over-looked and therefore had to improvise (so I didn't make much of it). Since Harry wasn't really hurt, it didn't bother Hermione enough to mention.
Glad you liked Draco's Sorting.
(#) Meteoricshipyards 2006-05-23Another good chapter. If he's lucky, Harry will defeat Voldie before his first year is over.
Thanks for writing! Looking forward to more.
Author's responseDefeat, yes, destroy, no. Voldie is still on the loose at the start of Harry's Third year.
- Thanks for writing, Dr. T. As a token of thanks for the fun you give me with your stories, I am correcting another typo. Here ya go:
"make certain it doesn't matter of Voldie tries to run or not."
You mean "make certain it doesn't matter if Voldie tries to run or not."
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