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Gerard's Nightmares are pulling him into darkness.How long can he hide it until he drags his band mates with him?? first fic so train-wreck expected :/
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Don't Stop If I Fall And Don't Look Back
(#) DarkRiddlesDestiny 2011-03-25
It's good so far Ghoul ^_^ Keep up the good work :D.Author's response
awww thanks kobra XD gonna add some horror later.Don't Stop If I Fall And Don't Look Back
(#) theescapist99 2011-03-25
You got me hooked. Update soon! :)Don't Stop If I Fall And Don't Look Back
(#) ChloesGreenDay 2011-03-26
Very good! I might just favourite it. Be careful with dialogue though, you seem to be writing speech in a really odd way. A normal sentance should look something like this.
(Random example)
"Gerard, you are a sexy beast."
xD You just need to put full stops in there and those double air quote things and you'll be alright. The 'single' line things are for when someone quotes someone else in either dialogue or narrative.
Like "If i'm the 'Sexy beast' then what are you?"
xD haha anyhow i really like this. Please continue,
Author's response
yeah, i'm not great with grammar and English cos i never pay attention at school XD liked your examples though.Don't Stop If I Fall And Don't Look Back
(#) YouCanRunAwayWithMe 2011-06-22
hello mr.author. from the amount u talk about this im wanting 2 read on (: you make it seem normal but kinda suggesting a future twist in the way you say 'never ths tired...' very cleverly done
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