(#) michae1ange1o 2011-05-02Ok .. huh .. well, just a couple of points. :) don't take this as a flame, I'm from the UK and have a few points of interest you may like to know.
Within England/Wales, criminal responsibility is considered the age of 10 years. This is when a child becomes criminally responsible for their actions and the consequences of their actions. From this age onwards, they can be prosecuted for any criminal offence in a Youth Court. In exceptional circumstances, most notably the case of the murder of James Bulger in Liverpool in 1993, children can be tried as an adult in an adult court.
Basicaly for Harry it would mean he could have killed the Dursleys in front of a witness and gotten away with it. The most that would have happened would have been Harry going to a care home until he was 18. A care home here is nothing more than a hotel for kids with a few rules and adult supervision, they are free to go out and play, go to school, get pocket money, presents on birthdays and x-mas. Heaven for Harry. Or they could go into foster care shrug. Stupid if you ask me, but thats the law here. 7 year old Johnny Rambo could mow down a bus o' nuns while on TV and walked.
Sorry to say this massive, massive blunder kinda turned me off the story a quarter way through chapter one.
My word of advice would be if your going to write a story about a legal system your not familiar with, either ask a native or check Google.
I'd have had the Dursleys die on holiday or work related in Pakistan say, and since he can't speak Urdu or them English they'd just lock him up in an Adult prison, no juve there, until Albus to the rescue! at age 11. But by then the 4 years would have turned him into a vicious little bastard, not evil, just a complete and utter cunt that would kick you in the balls at the first insult or shank you to steal your smokes and be totaly untrustworthy of other males.
(#) jabarber69 2011-05-03Man this is great! And I too find it really funny that all those muggleborns when finding out about the magical world and of course the missing Harry Potter wouldnt of blab about him being a convicted murderer of 7 YEARS OLD!!!!! and is in the juvenile detention where he will stay til he is 18 yrs old when he will be transferred to adult prison!!!!! talk about a load of dung!!!! and I find it really stupid that dumbydork dont know about harry or where he has been.....
- Your story has too many holes in it to be readable. Taken from the hospital against doctors orders would NEVER happen, doubly so for a 7 year old. Dursleys were obviously not upstanding citizens as they were apparently drug users and sellers. When Harry turned 11 and didn't show up at Hogwarts, or another magical school, someone high up would have had Fudge force Albus to bring Harry just to show him off.
- I was going to make a whole lot of comments but I will just try and sum up the story so far as best I can. you seem like a good writer but this story has a few holes in it… holes the size of London, there are so many things that don't even come close to adding up.
muggle UK legal system is just as corrupt and incompetent as the Magical UK system, Figg never tells Harry about being magic despite it being Obvious Dumbledore could care less about him being in prison at the age of 6 for something he did not do. Dumbledore does not send him his letter and no one in the wizarding world questions the absence of the B-W-L. he turns 15 and for some reason presumably Voldemort resurrecting so the wizarding world decides… "let's invite Harry to Hogwarts now" He reads about how it was Dumbledore who know where he was but never really questioned anything like why he was totally ignored all those years. then he meets some of the quality instructors at the school that it is taken for granted he will attend, and is adamant that he has not decided to do so but then he just changes his mind and he will go to Hogwarts despite knowing nothing.
he reads a few books and BOOM is caught up to the others his age. and after 15 years of neglect and being ignored by the wizarding world says "Yes I will help fight this dark lord of yours for you."
does that about cover it?
I don't even get your Dumbledore he clearly knew Harry was in jail yet talks like he lived with the Dursleys despite Sending Tonks to the Jail.
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