(#) itainohime 2006-06-04... very dark, sharp, and harsh. Personally, I don't usually like second-person perspectives, but it works here. Reading this was like getting punched in the face (in a good way), and the kiss at the end was handled very well--it didn't feel cheesy or fake in the slightest. My only critique is that people do not "loose" eyes; they "lose" them. Other than that, very well-done.
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