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American Girl.
5 reviewsZaria Armstrong is 13 years old, and has been in an orphanage since she was three. Her parents died in the 9/11 attack. When a certain Mr. Way adopts her 10 years later; will she let him be a fathe...
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American Girl.
(#) comatosejoyx 2011-06-02
Unrealistic, unclear story. Seems like many a time the writer just goes off on a tangent, writing with no relevance to the actual storyline which, though original, I do not think is well thought out or exciting. Could be a lot better.Author's response
Well of course it is unrealistic? It's fictional. And it does have relevance; but that hasn't been revealed yet. If you're not enjoying it don't read it, no one is forcing you to read my fiction. But thanks for letting me know your opinion.
~Val.American Girl.
(#) mcraddikt 2011-06-02
can u plz write more... like today?Author's response
Yes, I'm working on more as we speak :)American Girl.
(#) comatosejoyx 2011-06-03
I'm reviewing the story, I didn't say I was going to continue reading it.
Actually, fictional work isn't exactly unrealistic, how do you think people manage to relate to fictional things?
Also, if the audience doesn't see your relevance then you're sort of losing the point.
Do not try being rude towards me when it's your work that is letting you down.Author's response
I didn't intend to be rude, and I thanked you for your opinion. If you don't want to read it, don't. The majority of the work is unrealistic; yes, situations in stories are often easy to relate to, yes characters often are; but this is my work of fiction so I may portray the characters how I would like, giving them a slight unrealistic personality change. And I think other readers are seeing the relevance, otherwise they would have pointed it out to me like you have, or they would have asked. I don't think my work is letting me down as many others reading it seem to be enjoying my work. Often they have said "That wouldn't happen." or "I'm not sure I like the direction this is headed." and I take that into account when I write the next update to make sure they're enjoying it and are interested. Im sorry that I came of as rude; that wasn't intended.
~Val.American Girl.
(#) imjustagirlnotahero 2011-06-13
I love your story! I don't care whatever the other guys says, this is an amazing story that you have written here!Author's response
Thank you :)American Girl.
(#) paralove13 2011-06-14
Gosh. This story is absolutley amazing! I love it no matter what anyone else says. Write more soon? :)Author's response
aw thank you:3
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