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Mickey White
(#) Ithilwen 2006-06-01
"growled Fucky?" Again, you don't need a question mark. The one after "up" covered you.
"gasped Mickey?!" Same here. You are TELLING us that Mickey gasped some words. It doesn't matter that they formed a question.
The swearing and grossness is kind of over the top in this one.
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