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Unexpected
(#) japulapu 2011-07-19
I thought this was a really good start. You kept it short and simple instead and you were able to keep the attention of the reader all throughout. You've got style, just make sure you proof read your work once or twice to make sure you didn't make a grammatical error. But you caught the attention of the reader and thats what counts. I'm hungry for more....
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