- I knew it! Hah.
It's hard to believe the encounter with Yojimbo was only yesternight in the story arc. I didn't think this was too angsty. Rather, this chapter seems to give a renewed sense of trust and normalcy if anything.
I like your florid descriptions of Lulu here --everything sort of relaxes and flows, very appropriate given the setting.
Of course, the wriggle on the line near the end of the chapter cleverly keeps our interest.
Author's responsePhew, I was afraid I was getting a little carried away and might have lost some of my readers with that part. I prefer female characters with intelligence and strength -- but I'm afraid some primitive part of my brain is going "ooooo, SHINY" when I look at Lulu. mutters about sounding like idiot fanboys
And yeah, despite the angst, they're finding balance here -- the water is symbolic as well as gratuitous. :D
- I like the way Lulu reflects on the elements. She seems so steeped in magic that she would do something like that. I really enjoy the way you describe the huge mass of rock towering overhead. You really paint an impressive picture.
The way you describe Lulu's body encased in the water in the spring is absolutely beautiful, as I have said before of your writing, wonderfully poetic. And the idea that Lulu is being watched without her knowing it is also slightly delicious. Heh, she's just lucky that it IS Auron and not say a stray Ronso or Tidus or something.
I really enjoy the interaction between Lulu and Auron here too. I like the way that Auron finds Lulu so absolutely lovely, but he can't really bring himself to say much more than that she must know she's beautiful.
I really love the way that Lulu is the one in charge. That she demands that they don't let Yojimbo win. This is quite a lovely little chapter and sicne more earthshaking events are in store I think it works very well here.
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