(#) tortillachip 2011-11-28I think this chapter is really good and it makes sense. You shouldn't worry so much. What I like about this chapter is how Mikey says something, and then would think 'Do I really mean that? Of course I don't." It really shows how unsure he is of himself. I also like how Mikey would blame himself for everything. It was a clever way to show how insecure he is and how people have put him down enough to make him believe it. I also like how Frank is so willing to help him and he's so understanding about everything, but Mikey still can't trust him. Or at least trust him fully. It's really interesting when you write in Mikey's point of view because you get to see more about what he feels and thinks and all that stuff, but it would also be really interesting to see how Gerard feels about Frank being able to comfort Mikey. There are so many sides to this story and all those thing hold your interest. It's like you can't help but wonder what's going to happen next. Great job, as always.
Author's responseThank you very much!
I'm glad that you liked and got when Mikey kept doubting/contradicting himself, that was the part that I was unsure about. I wanted to make it clear how lost he is and how low his self-esteem/confidence is.
I think I'm going to write the next chapter in Gerard's POV. I was torn between Frank and Gerard, but your review has settled it, so thanks for helping me to decide.
Thank you very much for taking the time to leave such a detailed and helpful review! :)
(#) SyraStrange 2011-11-29Wow, you're being so good with updating. I wish I could do that XD... Do I sense a bizarre love triangle? Keep up the updates; gets me all smiley...
Author's responseThanks; I try to update every day when I can and reviews help me to do that - especially nice ones like yours! About the love triangle... I could tell you more; but where's the fun in that?
I'll try my best to keep updating; I enjoy writing too much not to, even if I'm not any good at it!
Thank you very much for taking the time to review! :)
(#) CatscanFlyy 2011-11-29You have to stop doubting you writing, it's so beautiful and poetic and I love how paced it is, I hate fics that go at a hundered miles an hour without you getting to know the characters, I know I said before but Mikey is the cutest thing ever and I feel like I'm putting myself on team Frikey because Gerard has been silly and hurt Mikey therfor doesn't deserve the sex god that is Frank Motherfucking Iero, I love how much you update it really made my day finding two new chapters, I am so glad I started reading this fic you are so talented and I'm totally hooked C: x
Author's responseThank you very much for leaving such a lovely, complementary review - it really did make me smile!
I'm really glad that you like it and think that it isn't going too slow; I really don't want this to be boring so reading a review like yours really did help.
Yes, Gerard has been silly; who could hurt cute little Mikey?
I try to update daily and reading reviews like yours really do motivate me to write!
Thank you soooo much for taking the time to leave such a kind review! :)
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