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Forsaken Virtue's
(#) RockMusic 2012-09-11
It is short. 666 words actually. I like it though :). I think at the end note you meant Prologue, not Epilogue. Than again, maybe you did. Like starting with the ending and in the actual story you work up to the end which is that piece. But I'm pretty sure you meant Prologue. Oh and helpful tip, add spaces between paragraphs, it makes it easier to read.
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Geesus, I wanted to leave a good review and not an actually 'review'. Sorry, hope it didn't come across mean. Just trying to help, you may ignore it if I sound like a bitch. I really do like this though.Author's response
hey,
thankyou for reviewing my story!!! It really helped, the main reason I stated this, was so I could get better at writting!!!! im going to fix my story right now. :PForsaken Virtue's
(#) XxPerfectTomorrowxX 2012-09-11
It does need spacing, and I agree completely with the above but it was good, very attention catching.
I'm intrigued to see what stopped Gerard, and where you'll go with this.
Unfortunately though if you don't have spacing and the following chapters are more than 666 words I won't be able to read it. It's a bit of a bother.
Anyway, good job!Author's response
Thankyou so much for reviewing and liking my story!!!!!!! hopefully I can improve on this for next time....:)
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