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(Trust Me)
(#) electricviolence 2012-11-29
Is this seriously your first fic? Because this is really good, and I can't wait for more!
Keep up the awesome work!
:DAuthor's response
Oh wow, thank you so much! I'm so flattered right now
It cut off my message but anyway, I used to write fanfiction when I was in 5th or 6th grade but they had awful internet abbreviations and AIM chat style conversation with little writing, so I don't really count those haha.(Trust Me)
(#) riza_lee 2012-11-29
Good job so far. This is just me so it's not a bad thing, but I don't like when writers jump from 1st person to 1st person. I feel like even though the writer says I'm reading for Frank now, or now it's Gerard, my head voice is still reading for the original 1st person. I like stories that only have one 1st person per chapter at least. It's just less confusing. Again, that's just me, your writing is really good so far and I'm looking forward to your next chapter.Author's response
I was thinking of putting each character's POV in separate chapters because I actually get confused as well. The only problem was that Frank's POV was really short this time and that would have made it awkward. Hopefully, I'll be able to make it work better in future chapters. But thank you :3
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