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One-Shot for Penina
8 reviewsA one shot for Penina.. just practicing some smuttiness.. gonna be shit,I just know it..
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One-Shot for Penina
(#) FrankIsMySexGod 2013-01-02
:D If only you could see how wide my smile is right now. Whoa!!! Haha. I can't believe you actualy wrote this!!! It's amazing and you're the best thing ever in life ever!!! Haha YAY!!! Frank and I have a baby!!! :'D This was awesome and I loved it! Thank you so much! :D xxAuthor's response
No problem!
Glad to be of service!!One-Shot for Penina
(#) xxMikeyxx 2013-01-02
They just can't keep their hands off each other.
Franina Forever!
Can I have one for me and Mikey?
Haven't thought of a pairing name...Amy and Mikey....mmmmmAuthor's response
hm...
I got two..
they'll be rubbish though but oh well..
I'm thinking..
Amikey or Mamy..One-Shot for Penina
(#) HoneyImMagical 2013-01-02
I have constructive criticism :)
I won't give it to you unless you want it though.Author's response
Just give it to me!!
It'll make me a better writer,you knowOne-Shot for Penina
(#) xxMikeyxx 2013-01-02
I thought of Mamy...I like it
MAMY!Author's response
All hail me for my awesome imagination!!
oh and I'll put up you're one shot..
I'll base it on one of MCR's many songs..
What one do ya want?One-Shot for Penina
(#) atomickilljoy 2013-01-02
Can you do a Bob and Jen one? If you want!Author's response
Sure I'll do a Bob and Jen one..
Do you want it to be a song fic type thing or a normal one?One-Shot for Penina
(#) FrankIsMySexGod 2013-01-02
Is it bad that I want a second one? :L xxAuthor's response
Not bad at all but you're writing it cuz my mum nearly caught me writing the smut..
I evaded it though.One-Shot for Penina
(#) xxMikeyxx 2013-01-02
Erm...I think...The Only Hope For Me Is You =)Author's response
Perfect song choise..
Wait,I'll write it now..One-Shot for Penina
(#) HoneyImMagical 2013-01-02
Since you want it...
It needs more detail. This will help add length and more imagery. For instance, maybe you could write a little bit about Frank's day at work, then lengthen out the before and during sex scene.
Also, a bit of better word choice would help :)
I hope you don't think I sound bitchy or something, it's just something I noticed.
Here's an example:
http://www.ficwad.com/story/30491Author's response
yeah,I know I had to do that..
I only didn't do that cuz my parents could easily find out about this,and I'd get into trouble,cuz I'm 13 and stuff..
Right,I can remember that tip.Add more detail.Got it.
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