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Eroninja
During his training trip, Naruto is given a scroll which holds the secrets in how to seduce and ensnare women. A scroll he uses at first on the women and kunoichi around him but soon on the Shinob...
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Eroninja
(#) Dickhentai 2014-10-04
Hi bro,
can you tell me, when kushina became part of naruHarem
cause i'm kinda like naruXkushina pairing, you know
So, i'll wait for your latest update
thanks
Good luck!!!Eroninja
(#) One-Of-The-Sin 2014-10-06
Ok maybe the fan dance is old but other thinks are copied from others. And I am not surprised that you are saying about not taking seriously. I was right and like a politician you will deny it and try to not take it seriously. And about Suckura and Sasugay are those bitches that will never change ever. and Again JIRAIYA DOESN'T APPROVES THIS FIC AS THIS IS CHEAP COPY.Author's response
I don't take you seriously because you don't take the time to explain your point instead relying on childish name calling to try and get it across. Sure it was big of you to admit that you didn't know that the fandance was an actual thing. But how seriously can I take a person that says, "Ok maybe the fan dance is old but other thinks are copied from others"
I also don't take you seriously because as an author you created a pair of stories and then just abandoned them after the first chapter. Perhaps because you didn't get enough attention or what not, rather than writing for the love of it and hoping more people would pay attention to your works. Also, I don't take you seriously because a fanficition writer should never say that a character can't change and should be willing to take the time to improve the characters they don't like instead just labeling them as you have. I don't particularly care for Sasuke, but I have read stories where he has been redeemed because the author took the time to do so in a meaningful way.
However, I never said that I didn't take inspiration from some of my lemons from other sources. I merely pointed out that you would have built a better case for yourself had you taken the time to actually list what them, rather than throwing out broad generalizations such as the above sentence where "others are taken from others" as you put it so eloquently. For example, Maki's scene was a nod to the ending of Basic Instinct. Naruto saying, "I could titfuck you all day," came from the hentai Lingerie offices, but everything else about the scene was all me, although as you can only make the broadest of comparisons I can understand why you have trouble seeing that as he was getting a titjob at the time. Also, one of the upcoming plotlines which has the "seeds" already planted takes heavy inspiration from one of the first Hentai videos I ever saw. Do you see how the above was done? If you had put that then perhaps I could take you seriously, but I was under no obligation to help build your case for you, and truthfully felt giving you more examples would just cause you to claim to have "seen" them yourself even if you hadn't.
In the end what I am writing is called fanfiction. I'm playing in someone else's sandbox as it were, so of course I'm inspired by other sources. Hell one of the reasons I don't use O.C's is because I would prefer to use characters with built in fanbases then create my own which only I care about. Most of my readers already know all the above they understand that fanfiction is about taking the things you enjoy and giving it new life in a world you help to shape, but you are simply a close-minded individual that thinks that shouting his opinion about a work which dwarfs anything he has put out there with namecalling and all capitals is the same as explaining it. If you think you can do better than I challenge you to do so, your own works after all could use some attention considering their pathetic and unfinished states.Eroninja
(#) Europefan01 2014-10-07
TLS, I am 100% agree with your statement on this issue regarding the series, and how extremely excellent authors like you made a very strong point across. As one of your loyal fans, I will follow you to the end, while skillfully read, observe and analyze both of your series from every chapter with a open mind. I still looking forward to the next chapter and beyond, keep it up mi amingo.
Until next time.
Adios.
P.S.: OOTS, the statement TLS made shows you how much a weak-minded, undisciplined imbecile you are. When it comes to fanfiction, authors like him has the power to write stories, changing sequences and situations, especially developing characters in a manner where mental and physical prowess is a must in any occasion. In other words, showing the importance of a role given to a said character and follow it.
That's all I got to say about this issue. One more thing I like to say to get it off of my chest regarding you.
WAKE UP STUPID!!!! Ugh.Eroninja
(#) Genesis2387 2014-10-11
I was just re-reading some of the chapters and the part about D (naruto's clone) reminded me about one piece, the will of D. So I was thinking if the history behind the initial D is something similar in the one piece story. Still keep up the great work. You make an excellent author.Author's response
Thank you for the review, and you might not realize it, but you made a rather large connection there.Eroninja
(#) One-Of-The-Sin 2014-10-18
Blah blah blah blah Its all I an hearing from you. so do one thing "CRAWL UNDER SOME ROCK AND DIE SO THAT WORMS AND INSECT WOULD FIEST ON YOU AND YOUR SOUL BURN IN HELL." AND MY STORY HAVE ENOUGH ATTENTION THEN YOURS. GO FUCK YOURSELF ASSHOLE.Author's response
I must thank you for responding. You have truly made my morning, as despite what you say. I know that you've taken everything I wrote to heart because you just can't help coming back for more. And what do we have but more personal name-calling and all caps screaming. By the way I imagine you screaming at your computer as you type out your barely thought-out rant. Perhaps next time you can inform me it that is true.
Now I had considered going to your stories to leave my own review. However, I felt that would be egging on a little internet troll, who surprise, surprise, doesn't need all that much prompting to spew his sad little venom. But since I know you can't help but come here to read my responses, allow me the pleasure of posting a review here.
Born with Lust is a story I would not bother with in most cases, but I made time for it just for you, as it turns Kushina into the town Bicycle with no explanation. Not to mention, supposedly the entire village still hates her son, but she doesn't mind being fucked by the very people who despise him, who you wrote was "life for her." Also, the whole putting where the scene takes place or the time period it is happening in above what you write, is just you being lazy. Would it kill you to maybe write a sentence or two that explains where the person was? I mean taking the first scene with Kushina for example. Rather than writing:
"Namikaze House
Naruto was sitting in hall. He was very sad like someone took his favourite toy from him. Kushina saw this and went to ask about his worries"
You could have written: "Naruto was sitting in the hall of the Namikaze household looking as if his favorite toy had been taken from him. Kushina upon seeing this, went to ask him what was making him so glum."
Do you see what I did there? I established the setting inside the story. But honestly calling what you've written a story is rather a stretch. It is a synopsis that explains little and is there just so you can get to your lemon, there is no build up or anything. I mean, despite his still being despised, the timid Hinata iswilling to date Naruto, and not only that, breaks-up with him. Where's the explanation for any of that, why would the timid Hinata be willing to show her feelings for Naruto when he is the most hated person in the village. Not to mention, he kind of proves her right that he only thinks of sex, when how does he respond to this development of her breaking up with him? By sleeping with his mom, who again, is the town bicycle.
Now even if the writing wasn't poor, and the scenario uninspired. Which you very classily admit to coming up with while watching porn in your college's computer lab. By the way, I really hope you cleaned up after yourself when you finished. I'm also curious as to how much of that video would we see in the lemon between Naruto and Kushina. Kind of a silly thing to admit considering just how much of an offense you took from a few of my lemons being inspired by movies and the like that I had watched. But getting back on point, at the very end of the chapter it ends in the predictable setting of Minato finding out. I mean seriously, we don't even know how old Naruto is here, but from his still playing with toys I'm guessing he's probably still in the academy or something. But let's just say, he's 13 like at the start of the series. Do you realize how stupid this ending is based on the simple fact that Kushina has been sleeping with his shinobi for 13 years without Minato being any the wiser, who as you point out could literally appear at home any moment. Wouldn't she have some means to keep track of him or to prevent such a thing from occurring? Did he just realize for the first time after 13 years that he could teleport home.
So in conclusion, Born with Lust is not a story. It is a weak synopsis that leads into a lemon. There's no build up, explanation of how the characters find themselves in their current situations, and more importantly no reason to care for them. Naruto, only does think of sex because that is how you portrayed him. Kushina is an unfaithful wife, whose been cheating on her husband simply because it made it easier for you to pair her with her son, and Minato is just the poor sap that you decided to keep around so he could be pushed around by his son, which is how I imagine the next chapter would have gone, if you actually intended to finish it that is. But seeing as it has been over a year, I'm guessing that isn't the case or you are the slowest person at typing in the world, as I wrote this out in about ten minutes.
In the end, instead of wasting your time being the little tough guy who can threaten others while hiding behind the veil of the internet. Perhaps, you should actually apply yourself to fleshing out your story, as I have to disagree with the idea that it has received enough attention, especially from you, the supposed author of the barely coherent and utterly pointless travesty. Your story, is everything wrong with Lemon fictions in general, facts and characters are changed just to fit whatever situation you feel like writing at the moment so you can get to the lemon as quickly as possible.
Now this review is about half as long as your entire "story". Therefore, I think it is safe to say that I have probably put more thought into it then you did into your work, which is extremely sad since you claimed to have reposted it as the first one didn't live up to your extremely high expectations. I look forward to the next time you get a little time in the computer lab and respond to me after watching some porn, and then rage typing your brilliant rejoinders. Please just remember to clean up after yourself, its a common courtesy that you could pay to the person that follows you.Eroninja
(#) Dickhentai 2014-10-19
Yes!!!!
Finaly.
i'm waiting for kushina to join naru Harem
Oh, btw
when U'll update "the pride"Eroninja
(#) Dickhentai 2014-10-19
Yes!!!!
Finaly.
i'm waiting for kushina to join naru Harem
Oh, btw
when U'll update "the pride"Author's response
The Pride's next update should come around the second or third week in November.Eroninja
(#) majintenchi 2014-10-28
so how does it feel to know that you've written a million words worth of porn with plot? this isn't an insult i like the story but if you look at it with an overarching view this story is more of a erotic novel then anything else.Eroninja
(#) Reon-D-Anubis 2014-11-26
I finally et to the latest chapter
Thanks for an amazing story
I hope to read more
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