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Eroninja
During his training trip, Naruto is given a scroll which holds the secrets in how to seduce and ensnare women. A scroll he uses at first on the women and kunoichi around him but soon on the Shinob...
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Eroninja
(#) samman9 2015-08-29
To the LemonSage
As my first review of this story let me start off by saying that you have written a truly addictive story of which I am eagerly anticipating the arrival of the next chapter after your hiatus. And you will be pleased to know that this is a story in which I have never been disappointed in reading and has taken an admittedly shallow franchise and added depth and complexity and has me avidly interested in the characters that has me rereading chapters for missed details and foreshadowing as well as the the sheer enjoyment factor.
So in this review I have a question/observation and a possible suggestion both regarding interactions between Kiyomi and the taki-nin and how it still might affect later chapters, I know that this is practically ancient history storywise but bear with me. I know that the contention between kiyomi and Naruto over the treatment of the taki-nin has more or less resolved but the dialogue between her and taki-nin in chapter 51 gives me the impression that she can still be similarly ruthless when slighted against. I am curious if this aspect of her personality will pop up later in the story involving other characters and if it will have future consequences for the “family”. As for my hopefully helpful suggestion I wonder if you will add either a limelight chapter or a section in a main story chapter involving Tifa and Kiyomi and them coming to terms with each other as Kiyomi stated in chapter 51. I am sure that you’ve had plenty of comments regarding the attention paid to some of the female characters so I will spare you of any comments of that nature and trust in you too continue to produce a grand story and hope that my suggestion is a helpful one
Author's response
Thank you very much for giving my story your first review. I'm glad it hasn't disappointed and I hope that continues to be the case.
To answer your question, I kind of feel Kiyomi has moved beyond the woman that could be that vindictive. After all, her talk with Ibiki shows that she knows that she can't just violate people's minds to make issues go away. Granted, she had a more personal reason for her actions against the Taki-nin, but the lessen learned there she applied to her dealing with Ibiki. Now, I still believe she can be ruthless against those she feels are a danger to her family, but that would be in the more physically destructive sense. I don't really have plans to show such a scene between Tifa and Kiyomi. I feel a similar one would be the Mikoto and Tsume scene where they buried their differences. To me, once Naruto selects a woman it is kind of implied that those that might have issue with one another tend to put them behind them. I like to believe it is because they recognize that Naruto's recognizing them as being good enough for the family tends to mean past issues belong in the past. If Tifa and Kiyomi appear together again their history and this new kinship might be referenced. But, I do not necessarily know if it required its own scene to get it across.
Thank you again.Eroninja
(#) dude89 2015-11-15
Well here we go. Let me start off with the basics. First of all i really, really enjoy your story immensely. Usually i don't take the time to write reviews but i felt the need to comment on this (anything but) little gem. I'm actually still a bit euphoric, because i started reading this story a few years ago on another site. I already thought this story was discontinued, and decided more or less on a whim to google it and found it here with 20+ new chapters. So after tearing through the new content i'm sitting here writing this useless rambling. But enough of that. Let's get to actually commenting. I simply love what you are doing with this story. I don't think i ever read a harem story that i enjoyed that much. You are staying, as far as i can tell, very truthfull and respectful to nearly all characters, which, even now, i still find hard to believe with a 50+ harem. Sure you have to bent a charecter sometimes but thats only natural in a story of this magnitude. But this is still the most tasteful harem story i ever read. Even more impressive is, in my opinion, the development of the world and the characters' reactions. You managed to give this story a very original spin while seamlessly incorporating canon and the movies. I am really looking forward to the next chapters and how everything will develop, with the only downside being that it will take a while with your other stories. I think it works so well because you really take the time to flesh out the charaecters and especially the world. So all in all i am really impressed with your writing. I tip my hat, sir.
If i had to mention anything negative it would have to be your grammer. Now first of all, let me say that english is not my first language, so this could actually be my own lack of grammatical knowledge. But i have the feeling that sometime sentences are not structured the right way. Again, could only be my mistake, if so i sincerely apologize. but if i'm right, i'm just annoyed that such a superb story has such a minor inconvenience to its name. So to come (finally) to a close, i am a big fan, keep the good work up. The gallant sage of Mt. myoboku would be proud. (BTW am i the only one who is annoyed that jiraiya is the only sannin that actually died by the end of naruto?)
Sincerly, yours,
a fan
Eroninja
(#) JamesSawTooth 2016-01-11
okay this is my first time reviewing on here and ive gotta say this is by far the most SMUTTY story ive read and i am a awesome fan and your the reason ive made an account on here i think ive contacted you under the account Naruto Uzumaki Hyuuga(for those that judge i never liked the thought of naruto being the son of the Fourth Hokage(Again just my personal opinion you dont like? then kiss my ass))
Eroninja
(#) DragonSlayerWolf 2016-03-02
Just wanted to ask if you were aware that somebody is turning your fic into a comic?Author's response
I am aware and fully support StikyfinkaZ efforts to do so.Eroninja
(#) RinneganNoOzil 2016-03-03
Thank you for writing this amazing fic. Please do not die before completing it!Eroninja
(#) ValentineMeikin20xx 2016-03-09
I have to say that Eroninja is good for not falling into several tropes I hate with Naruto fiction, like a lot of anime adaptations having Sakura be high up in the pecking order, while Hinata is ignored, and Haku telling the truth with 'That One Line'.
Also, it has a deep plot, and goes beyond Naruto making a harem out of every girl in the Elemental Nations, and even into plots within plots within plans like the series it's from.
I look forward to the chapter named 'Target: Kaguya'.
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