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• Origins

  (#) celerystalksatnoon 2006-08-21

  It wasn't bad. It wasn't mindblowingly great, but it really wasn't bad. I think that the way you worked the song in went rather smoothly, but it seemed that it overpowered the rest of the story, which probably isn't the effect you're going for, is it? I also think that the characters played out quite well, but it seemed that Jiraiya said "sake" just a few too many times in a short space. It came off as a little funny. Except for a bit of polish here and there, well done.

• Origins

  (#) Laeris 2006-09-06

  When it comes to grammar and spelling, I suck. So, I cannot be of any help here. Your story is insightful and interesting. I think you will find that if you keep writing, you will only get better and better. I hope you will write more.

• Origins

  (#) HakuRules1424 2006-10-23

  You sorta lost me at the end with sasuke and naruto anyway that was really good lol ttyl Cya

• Origins

  (#) Inufan_000 2007-03-03

  Sorry but I must be honest: I could care a less about the story but I liked it sorta'. But what I Love about it was: You used Evanescence's- Missing.

• Origins

  (#) Inufan_000 2007-03-03

  Starts Crying

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