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Chapter Two: An Accidental Capture
2 reviewsAhahaha. Lookit what Zach runs into on his way to Cherrygrove.
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(#) whatareyouevensaying 2006-07-30
A good chapter. I'd give you a more complete review, but my keyboard isn't working properly (I have to press some keys multiple times to get them to work).Author's response
Thankies-And I've had to do that multiple times. I think we're on our seventh keyboard, or something of the sort. Most of it is due to the fact that we often have little kids over though, and they pour/spill/dump/mash or otherwise kill the keyboards.Sibling Rivalry
(#) Camera_Doesnt_Lie 2006-08-12
Again, not bad. With a little practice, I think you'll do fine writing.
I have to admit, I tried to keep track of the instructions the Pokedex was listing off and found myself a little lost. Good touch, though, since it's probably a pretty complicated piece of equipment.
Keep up the good work.Author's response
That's good, since some day I hope to write a story of my own to actually publish. Still, I do need practice first. ^^
Yea, they probably are a bit hard to keep track of. Still, Zach is what I would imagine myself to be, though to a more exaggerated extent. I wouldn't be afraid of all pokemon, for example. Still, I'd be staring at the pokedex like it was speaking a foreign language, since I personally wouldn't expect a piece of machinery to talk to me.
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